Example Narrative Response

Overall I think that this example essay was a good one. I didn't have a lot of complaints about it. First off, I thought the content of the story was a good one. Not something that would happen everyday, but it is a feasible situation. I also thought the theme that her story revolved around was smart to choose. The realization that material things aren't as essential in our life as we think they are is something most of us have had to think about at some point in our life. The way the writer described the subway to the reader was good. The details make it easier to understand the story as a whole. One thing I noticed what her diction when she wrote about calling nana. It makes shows how the writer is feeling at that moment, younger and more vulnerable kids tend to call their grandma nana. Some things I noticed that I didn't like were how short the story feels. I know it shouldn't feel like a novel, but it feels like the writer is racing to finish. I also noticed a couple grammar and spelling errors, but those are to be expected in a rough draft.